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4F-New-Brochure-SVGs.zip

Looking at this now, will make comments soon.

First, smaller image:
1. I'm a big fan of the general concept (put the Four Foundations side by side)
2. There are some letter-spacing issues, most noticeable with the headers, but also with the subtitles. In particular, the Features and First subtitles overlap in places.
3. Typo: s/enginieering/engineering
4. Coolness subtitle: "Leaders, teams, everyone is just for you" should be rephrased to better indicate the Friends Foundation (perhaps something like "Be a leader, collaborate with a team, however you contribute you'll find and make friends here!", as a rough idea)
4. I can't evaluate the Readiness subtitle because some of it is cut off and there is an overlap with the Greatness subtitle.

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Bigger image:

1. Now I can see the Readiness subtitle. "Tools for engineering in every release into your hand" is somewhat broken English, and doesn't quite capture the First Foundation. Perhaps the intent was something like this "Engineer the leading edge of open source"? Although I can't tell...

2. Suggested Freedom bold paragraph text edits: "We're serious about user freedom - and we don't say that lightly - we take it seriously. We stand up for our beliefs. Free software and free software ethics is an essential part of Fedora and the Fedora community."

3. Suggested Friends bold paragraph text edits: "We're a diverse, welcoming community. Our strength comes from our diversity. From new beginners to veteran hackers, we're a committed and welcoming team."

4. There are many different ways you can go with the Greatness paragraph, but I'd suggest an emphasis on the upstream feature development characteristic of the Fedora project. So something like this might work: "Excellence in Fedora means excellence in the broader free software world. We don't keep our innovations to ourselves, we work upstream with projects directly so all users can benefit from our improvements, in an open and transparent process."

5. Suggested First bold paragraph text edits: "Our focus on upstream innovation keeps Fedora users on the leading edge of the open source world. Come create the future with us".

6. I feel like there are some kerning issues in the Boldness, Coolness, Greatness, and Readiness titles. In particular the spacing between the following look uneven to me:
   - "Bo" and "ess" in Boldness
   - "Coo" and "ess" in Coolness
   - "rea" and "ess" in Greatness, and
   - "ead" and "ess" in Readiness

Overall the HU design team has a great flyer/banner concept that looks fantastic. I do think that implementing my tiny suggestions could help polish it. Well done!

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